Tuesday, December 11, 2012

Formal Paper #2 Final Draft and Works Cited



William Drury
ENGL 1A
Instructor Knapp
27 November 2012

Dear fellow human being,
            I’m writing to you on behalf of truly significant yet often overlooked matters. To truly deliver the message of this letter, I would like for you to focus on your core principles and values society. I’ve referred to you as a fellow human being, rather than using the word person, because the word person may provide a faulty meaning. A person, whether male or female, usually falls to pressures imposed on by society, for society sets standardsfor women and men. Consequently, society determines a person’s values based on his or her gender. So, I’m reminding you to not lose yourself in society; to not become the ordinary “person” who may give up his or her true principles and values just to fit into society’s demanding rules. I’m writing to you personally, as a fellow human being, to encourage you to stay true to yourself.
            To begin, several aspects of society apply pressure on men. In one prevalent area of society, popular culture, wealth advocated to measure a man’s status. For example, Lil Wayne, a hip-hop icon, influences society on his view of society. Because Lil Wayne’s song “Got Money” ranked thirty-third in American pop music and second for hip-hop in 2008, he holds a prominent influence in popular culture (Wikipedia). From the lyrics in his song “Got Money,” Lil Wayneemphasizes that monetary wealth equates to personal value: “I need a Winn Dixie grocery bag full of money right now to the VIP section.” By connecting money to a VIP(very important person) status, Lil Wayne expresses that money can make a person valuable, important,
significant, or even powerful, which may influence listeners to take action to obtain money..Consequently, as male fans admire Lil Wayne’s persona, they may inherit his viewof economic wealth determining personal importance. Also, as male fans praise Lil Wayne’s dominant position in society, male fans may not only perceive economic wealth as a determinant of personal value, but also as a masculinity factor. Thus, Lil Wayne’s fans, in order to amplify personal and masculine value, may take action to obtain money. Acquiring fiscal power may prove very beneficial, but because some individuals may pursue economic wealth mainly from society’s influence, they may actually lose value in themselves. By submitting to Lil Wayne’s view of making money to increase personal value, individuals may disregard their own views on what constitutes a man’s importance.
On the contrary, economic wealth represents personal value and masculinity, thenlack of wealth must represent failure. For instance, if men drive clunkers and wear lousy suits, as opposed to driving lavish cars and wearing high-end suits, they may feel as if they have a low value in society. As a result, low-income men may have a low self-esteem, and to overcome that low sense of self, they apply serious effort into gaining material wealth. Some men may be influenced to work long hours on a hard-working job to ensure that they have enough fiscal power to be considered manly. Consequently, as desperate men consume their time into obtaining money, they may abandon their former dreams or goals.
Moreover, society sets a standard for men to be successful. Personally, I have experienced the standard that young men should be going to a university to be considered successful. Shortly after my high school graduation, former classmates and I gathered at a party. I began conversing with a girl named Jenna and a few of her friends. After I told them that I was simply working at a warehouse, they laughed. Then Jenna commented to her friends, “He’s not like those other guys. They’re going to UCLA, they’re going somewhere.” Immediately, I felt the impact of Jenna’s message: I should be going to a university to be a successful young man. During the party, my peers expressed their feelings of accomplishment by sporting university apparel, discussing university sports, and conversing about university courses.Both the university-setting of the party and Jenna’s comment left me feeling inferior. My job title as a warehouseman opposed the idea of a young man’s status in my local community, and my peers  However, I realized that this standard for young men failed to truly measure success., but attendance at a university failed to measure my success. By working full-time and earning money, I was accomplishing a personal goal of mine, which truly measured my success.
Furthermore, men are pressured to exemplify power. In some communities, young men join gangs to display power. Gangs commonly exist in America, especially in urban areas. As the gang population increases, it appeals to more young men in society. Gangs mostly consist of males from eighteen to twenty two years of age, all of whom participate in dangerous activities to gain power as credit to their manhood. To fit into gangs, members may fight several other gang members at the same time and participate in robbery and murder. In order to find reason to a gang member’s existence, I asked my friend Jonathan, a former gang member, why he would join such a brutal group. He replied, “In some areas, that’s how us young males prove our manhood. When I finally joined my gang, I had power among the other men in my community.” Jonathan’s answer expressed that his community pressured him into joining his former gang. Jonathan may not have wanted to join a gang, but his goal to express power compelled him to do so. As evinced by Jonathan’s former gang membership, society may influence men to have  power. Men across the globe may similarly be influenced to participate in extremities, such as gang activity, to be considered powerful.
In addition, society influences women to hold a certain degree of beauty. Advertisement, such as in magazines, billboards, and television commercials, influence women to expose beauty. For example, T-mobile, a telecommunications company, influences young girls to be pretty. T-mobile uses Carly Foulkes, a young, attractive female model, to represent their company. In one particular television commercial, T-mobile simply displays Carly Foulkes, a cellular phone, and a white background (Tschorn). Other than her physical allure in a pink dress, pink lipstick, and pink high heels, the commercial does not reveal anything about Foulkes. Thus, T-mobile primarily uses Foulkes's physical beauty to sell their product. By  advertising Foulkes's beauty to attract viewers, T-mobile sets a standard of beauty among women, for T-mobile's advertisements reach a significantly large audience. As young women view and potentially admire Foulkes's image, they may be influenced to display a physical appearance to that of Foulkes's. Not all girls may pursue Foulkes's archetypal image, but because T-mobile's advertisements extensively appear in society, they imply that young women should appear as beautiful. Thus, young women may feel pressured to flaunt the ideal degree of beauty as displayed by Foulkes.
Next, society may encourage women to undergo extreme measures to satisfy their view on their physical appearances. For example, several women acquire cosmetic surgery to obtain beauty. In the year of 2004, American surgeons executed nearly nine million cosmetic surgeries, which included breast augmentations, tummy tucks, and liposuction (Friedman). In her article Cosmetic Surgery, author Jane Friedman expressed the influence of television makeover shows on cosmetic surgery: "...TV makeover shows downplay the risks of cosmetic surgery and give girls and women the unhealthy message that they should be physically perfect" (Friedman). Resultantly, because television makeover shows fail to warn of potential dangers associated with cosmetic surgery, female viewers may comfortably acquire cosmetic surgery to obtain physical excellence. This idea of  physical excellence, set forth by television makeover shows, may reach a substantial amount of female viewers. In today's world, people view television on such a regular basis that television may comprise a large aspect of society. Therefore, as television makeover shows influence female viewers to pursue physical excellence, society inflicts a standard of beauty upon women. As women pursue this idea of beauty, such as those of the nine million who participated in cosmetic surgery in 2004, they may abandon personal comfort by doing so, for any type of surgery may appear daunting for a human being. Women who undergo cosmetic surgery may do so to reach a form of beauty, but reaching for beauty through cosmetic surgery truly calls for desperation and fear, both of which contradict values within beauty.
In conclusion, the world seems to pressure people into having certain values. Men are influenced to have money, power, and success, whereas women are influenced to have a nearly impeccable degree of beauty.  Not all men and women may concur with the expected behavior of their genders, but because society sets criteria of what is right for certain gender roles, it must be difficult to oppose society's desired ways. Societal impact on gender remains significant because it applies to every human being.  The world should not pressure individuals into carrying certain values, for every individual has unique characteristics and should live with what they inherently have. Finally, I've listed the previous details of societal impact in order to remind you to stay true to yourself. Although society may influence people to have certain values, human beings should not feel pressured to fit into society.

William Drury
ENGL 1A
Instructor Knapp
30 November 2012
Works Cited

"Got Money." Wikipedia. Wikimedia Foundation, 12 Oct. 2012. Web. 15 Nov. 2012.
            The source "Got Money" provides information on Lil Wayne and his song "Got Money". The article provide information on how successful Lil Wayne placed on the music charts. The article's information proved valuable because it gives readers details on Lil Wayne, which helps readers understand him.
Friedman, Jane. "Cosmetic Surgery." CQ Researcher 15 Apr. 2005: 317-44. Web. 22 Nov. 2012.
            The article "Cosmetic Surgery" provides details on cosmetic Surgery. Author Jane Friedman listed reasons, outcomes, and potential dangers from cosmetic surgery. The            article connects the media's influence on cosmetic surgery. Friedman provides statistics                      to support her data.

Tschorn, Adam.  "Burning Questions: Just Who is T-Mobile's Stylish New 4G Girl, and Who        Made That Pink-and-White Dress?" Los Angeles Times 16 Nov. 2010. Web. 20 Nov.            2012.

            Adam Tschorn's article provides useful information on T-mobile's commercials featuring   Carly Foulkes. Tschorn gives backround information on Carly Foulkes. The article also      notes Foulkes's appearance in T-mobile's commercials. The article also reveals an image           from one of T-mobile's commercials.

 

Formal Paper #2 Annotated Bibliography



William Drury
ENGL 1A
Instructor Knapp
30 November 2012
Works Cited

"Got Money." Wikipedia. Wikimedia Foundation, 12 Oct. 2012. Web. 15 Nov. 2012.
            The source "Got Money" provides information on Lil Wayne and his song "Got Money". The article provide information on how successful Lil Wayne placed on the music charts. The article's information proved valuable because it gives readers details on Lil Wayne, which helps readers understand him.
Friedman, Jane. "Cosmetic Surgery." CQ Researcher 15 Apr. 2005: 317-44. Web. 22 Nov. 2012.
            The article "Cosmetic Surgery" provides details on cosmetic Surgery. Author Jane Friedman listed reasons, outcomes, and potential dangers from cosmetic surgery. The            article connects the media's influence on cosmetic surgery. Friedman provides statistics                      to support her data.

Tschorn, Adam.  "Burning Questions: Just Who is T-Mobile's Stylish New 4G Girl, and Who        Made That Pink-and-White Dress?" Los Angeles Times 16 Nov. 2010. Web. 20 Nov.            2012.

            Adam Tschorn's article provides useful information on T-mobile's commercials featuring   Carly Foulkes. Tschorn gives backround information on Carly Foulkes. The article also      notes Foulkes's appearance in T-mobile's commercials. The article also reveals an image           from one of T-mobile's commercials.

Formal Paper #2 Rough Draft



William Drury
ENGL 1A
Instructor Knapp
27 November 2012

Dear fellow human being,
            I’m writing to you on behalf of truly significant yet often overlooked matters. To truly deliver the message of this letter, I would like for you to focus on your core principles and values society. I’ve referred to you as a fellow human being, rather than using the word person, because the word person may provide a faulty meaning. A person, whether male or female, usually falls to pressures imposed on by society, for society sets standardsfor women and men. Consequently, society determines a person’s values based on his or her gender. So, I’m reminding you to not lose yourself in society; to not become the ordinary “person” who may give up his or her true principles and values just to fit into society’s demanding rules. I’m writing to you personally, as a fellow human being, to encourage you to stay true to yourself.
            To begin, several aspects of society apply pressure on men. In one prevalent area of society, popular culture, wealth advocated to measure a man’s status. For example, Lil Wayne, a hip-hop icon, influences society on his view of society. Because Lil Wayne’s song “Got Money” ranked thirty-third in American pop music and second for hip-hop in 2008, he holds a prominent influence in popular culture (Wikipedia). From the lyrics in his song “Got Money,” Lil Wayneemphasizes that monetary wealth equates to personal value: “I need a Winn Dixie grocery bag full of money right now to the VIP section.” By connecting money to a VIP(very important person) status, Lil Wayne expresses that money can make a person valuable, important, significant, or even powerful, which may influence listeners to take action to obtain money..Consequently, as male fans admire Lil Wayne’s persona, they may inherit his viewof economic wealth determining personal importance. Also, as male fans praise Lil Wayne’s dominant position in society, male fans may not only perceive economic wealth as a determinant of personal value, but also as a masculinity factor. Thus, Lil Wayne’s fans, in order to amplify personal and masculine value, may take action to obtain money. Acquiring fiscal power may prove very beneficial, but because some individuals may pursue economic wealth mainly from society’s influence, they may actually lose value in themselves. By submitting to Lil Wayne’s view of making money to increase personal value, individuals may disregard their own views on what constitutes a man’s importance.
On the contrary, economic wealth represents personal value and masculinity, thenlack of wealth must represent failure. For instance, if men drive clunkers and wear lousy suits, as opposed to driving lavish cars and wearing high-end suits, they may feel as if they have a low value in society. As a result, low-income men may have a low self-esteem, and to overcome that low sense of self, they apply serious effort into gaining material wealth. Some men may be influenced to work long hours on a hard-working job to ensure that they have enough fiscal power to be considered manly. Consequently, as desperate men consume their time into obtaining money, they may abandon their former dreams or goals.
Moreover, society sets a standard for men to be successful. Personally, I have experienced the standard that young men should be going to a university to be considered successful. Shortly after my high school graduation, former classmates and I gathered at a party. A began conversing with a girl named Jenna and a few of her friends. After I told them that I was simply working at a wharehouse, they laughed. Then Jenna commented to her friends, “He’s not like those other guys. They’re going to UCLA, they’re going somewhere.” Immediately, I felt the impact of Jenna’s message: I should be going to a university to be a successful young man. During the party, my peers expressed their feelings of accomplishment by sporting university apparel, discussing university sports, and conversing about university courses.Both the university-setting of the party and Jenna’s comment left me feeling inferior. My job title as a wharehouseman opposed the idea of a young man’s status in my local community, and my peers  However, I realized that this standard for young men failed to truly measure success., but attendance at a university failed to measure my success. By working full-time and earning money, I was accomplishing a personal goal of mine, which truly measured my success.
Furthermore, men are pressured to exemplify power. In some communities, ypung men join gangs to display power. Gangs commonly exist in America, especially in urban areas. As the gang population increases, it appeals to more young men in society. Gangs mostly consist of males from eighteen to twenty two years of age, all of whom participate in dangerous activities to gain power as credit to their manhood. To fit into gangs, members may fight several other gang members at the same time and participate in robbery and murder. In order to find reason to a gang member’s existence, I asked my friend Jonathan, a former gang member, why he would join such a brutal group. He replied, “In some areas, that’s how us young males prove our manhood. When I finally joined my gang, I had power among the other men in my community.” Jonathan’s answer expressed that his community pressured him into joining his former gang. Jonathan may not have wanted to join a gang, but his goal to express power compelled him to do so. As evinced by Jonathan’s former gang membership, society may influence men to have  power. Men across the globe may similarly be influenced to participate in extremities, such as gang activity, to be considered powerful.
In addition, society influences women to hold a certain degree of beauty. Advertisement, such as in magazines, billboards, and television commercials, influence women to expose beauty. For example, T-mobile, a telecommunications company, influences young girls to be pretty. T-mobile uses Carly Foulkes, a young, attractive female model, to represent their company. In one particular television commercial, T-mobile simply displays Carly Foulkes, a cellular phone, and a white background (Tschorn). Other than her physical allure in a pink dress, pink lipstick, and pink high heels, the commercial does not reveal anything about Foulkes. Thus, T-mobile primarily uses Foulkes's physical beauty to sell their product. By  advertising Foulkes's beauty to attract viewers, T-mobile sets a standard of beauty among women, for T-mobile's advertisements reach a significantly large audience. As young women view and potentially admire Foulkes's image, they may be influenced to display a physical appearance to that of Foulkes's. Not all girls may pursue Foulkes's archetypal image, but because T-mobile's advertisements extensively appear in society, they imply that young women should appear as beautiful. Thus, young women may feel pressured to flaunt the ideal degree of beauty as displayed by Foulkes.
Next, society may encourage women to undergo extreme measures to satisfy their view on their physical appearances. For example, several women acquire cosmetic surgery to obtain beauty. In the year of 2004, American surgeons executed nearly nine million cosmetic surgeries, which included breast augmentations, tummy tucks, and liposuction (Friedman). In her article Cosmetic Surgery:Are Tougher Safety Regulations Needed?, author Jane Friedman expressed the influence of television makeover shows on cosmetic surgery: "...TV makeover shows downplay the risks of cosmetic surgery and give girls and women the unhealthy message that they should be physically perfect" (Friedman). As a Result, because television makeover shows fail to warn of potential dangers associated with cosmetic surgery, female viewers may comfortably acquire cosmetic surgery to obtain physical excellence. This idea of  physical excellence, set forth by television makeover shows, may reach a substantial amount of female viewers. In today's world, people view television on such a regular basis that television may comprise a large aspect of society. Therefore, as television makeover shows influence female viewers to pursue physical excellence, society inflicts a standard of beauty upon women. As women pursue this idea of beauty, such as those of the nine million who participated in cosmetic surgery in 2004, they may abandon personal comfort by doing so, for any type of surgery may appear daunting for a human being. Women who undergo cosmetic surgery may do so to reach a form of beauty, but reaching for beauty through cosmetic surgery truly calls for desperation and fear, both of which contradict values within beauty.